A soldier's reaction after he thinks hard about the internal conflicts of his country. When he looks around, all he sees is corrupted system, stained politics and illogical disputes perfectly imbibed n camouflaged . All he thinks is that --- >
to deter me.
Roughest,
not rough enough
to
unnerve me.
What
creeps me, are
the
enemies inside.
I
swear
Outsiders
can never harm
my
country. But I worry
as
I see everyday
loudmouthed
leering Lucifers
roaming
around
walking
free.
Suspected,
yet unseen.
Their
slates are too clean.
Well
disguised in appearance
they
seem, innocuously serene.
Faulty
system, filthy politics
Signal
them green.
I
stand here, securing borders
with
cold, watchful, vigilant faces
But
potential enemies, harboring
Inside,
well secured
In
some complicated hiding places.
“Blame
Game” new sensational
National Game. Morbid curiosities
Rising
high
I
want you all to
listen to
this Soldier’s Cry.
Wake up your dormant senses.
Smell
this reek of enemy inside.
Its
time- time to find out
plausible
hidey-holes of
perfectly
fake humans.
Flourishing
on our soils
spoiling
nationwide.
BEAUTIFUL , I loved this poem ..
ReplyDeleteyes the soldier out there who is on the border protecting our nation from outsiders .. how sad he feels thinking is HIS own family safe from the people in his own country.
Sad situation in our nation , the one because of whom we can sleep at night cant sleep thinking himslef ..
Bikram's
exactly soldiers who should feel proud about their ppl r forced to think opposite.
Deletealways a pleasure to see ur comment.
thanks !!!
Excellent and well perceived from a soldier state. It’s just like kicking someone on his back when he supposes to defend one from enemies. It’s quite dishonoring the precious life that lost for our living.
ReplyDeleteGreatly penned Jyoti!!
yes i agree its very dishonoring
Deletethanks !!
lovely JOJO :)
ReplyDeletethanks chinmaya
Deletealways a pleasure to see ur comment.
Very well depicts the present state of affairs! Also, it makes the life of a solider even more difficult when employed for insurgency to fight his own kin!
ReplyDeleteyes.. we can only imagine hw bad they feel fighting their own countrymen, when they were trained n employed to protect same :(
DeleteThanks !!
Refreshingly real Jyoti! Those whom we trust to take care of the government are lining their pockets. They maul each other for the biggest cake. Those soldiers who place their lives in danger protecting the nation just wonder why this state of affairs is allowed to happen. Great verse!
ReplyDeleteHank
exactly we can only imagine how bad they feel.
Deletethanks hank :)
Wow great verse indeed and yeah the blame game is all anyone seems to be able to come up with when asked why.
ReplyDeletetrue this game is incredibly annoying, yet almost everyone plays it.
DeleteThanks pat :)
“Blame Game” new sensational
ReplyDeleteNational Game. Morbid curiosities
Rising high
I want you all to
listen to this Soldier’s Cry.
True and Touchy
thank u mam !!
ReplyDeleteAs with all your poetry, this is raw and powerful. I'm intensely patriotic and while I never believe that war is any answer to any problem, I will always, always support our armed forces when they are on active deployment. They are unsung heroes on a daily basis. With your words, you do them a lot of honor.
ReplyDeleteLoving you, sweetheart! <3
- Dawn
u r absolutely right they r the real heroes..
Deletelots of love to u too <3
the enemies inside are all too real...i fear the same of my own country...and the blame game...is sadly played out far too often and in it no responsibility is ever taken...
ReplyDeleteyes "responsibility" is what matters most n that seems to be unattainable these days !!
DeleteGlad to c u Brian :)
Very true. Enemies inside are more dangerous than the outside.
ReplyDeleteexactly !!
DeleteVery true and nice!
ReplyDeleteregards
thanks yash !!
DeleteExcellent. You have reflected a sad reality through his eyes.
ReplyDeletethanks.. I tried !!
Deleteकल 31/01/2012 को आपकी यह पोस्ट नयी पुरानी हलचल पर लिंक की जा रही हैं.आपके सुझावों का स्वागत है .
ReplyDeleteधन्यवाद!
Very well narrated the political scenario these days. Dark take on current affairs, couldn't have penned better!
ReplyDeleteCheers
~ Chintan
Thanks Chintan !!
DeleteRight on time! Now.. am I? You create beautiful and intense pictures in your words.. It's like hearing it from the horse's mouth. Lovel narration. Going through all your previous posts which I missed Jyo! Forgive me *bows*
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Visited new one :)
Deleteloved it..
Always a pleasure to read ur comments dear :)
thanks
Wisely written. Very apt for the present scenario.
ReplyDeleteJyoti,
ReplyDeleteA very factual statement and not very far off from what a soldier guarding nation in freezing cold may be thinking. If this stat of affairs goes on & on then day is not far when you will not have anyone to stop outsiders coming in to rule us again. Hope this voice of yours kindles some conscience in people at the helm of our nation.
Take care
I wish the same !!
DeleteReally well written...cudnt have said it in a better way!
ReplyDeletethanks ria :)
Delete“Blame Game” new sensational
ReplyDeleteNational Game. Morbid curiosities
Rising high
I want you all to
listen to this Soldier’s Cry.
So,you are back Jyoti again with an excellent
writing skill.Soldier's cry should be listened
and felt by all.
Superb!
I am sorry being late on your post due to
laptop and net problem.
Find time to visit my blog.
glad u liked it :)
Deletealways a pleasure to see your comment !!
Really it is the time to listen the soldier's cry.....
ReplyDeleteyes it is:)
Deletethanks !!
WOW, what profound work. We can never understand what they go through...
ReplyDeleteyeah.. its very hard as we all live in our comfort zones...its very wrong to say that we understand them !!
Deletethanks
how nicely you have slipped into the soldier's shoes & seen the world through his eyes & given a voice to his anguish
ReplyDeletedeep & moving Jyoti
glad to have u back
hope the exams went well
thanks
Deleteexams were good :)
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ReplyDeletethanks u piyush !!
DeleteWelcome here
Nice thoughts, well expressed..
ReplyDeleteU hav not come to my blog since long..
thanks pradeep !!!
Deletewill visit soon
True indeed, we can safeguard our country from enemey outside but the enemy inside would always be happily safe, rejoicing his freedom. It seems pathetic sometimes when we reaslise how we ignore and overlook the terrible corruption and everything that ruins the country inside.
ReplyDeleteExactly..
Deletethanks Elvirah
Welcome here !!
Wake up your dormant senses.
ReplyDeleteSmell this reek of enemy inside.
....Very true...Our soldiers can defend the country from outside enemies, but we will have to fight ourselves the enemies who are weakening the country from inside. Inspiring thoughts beautifully expressed.
true but sad !!
Deletethank u sir :)
well expressed..
ReplyDeletethanks u sanjay ji !!
DeleteBeing a soldier is no doubt very difficult. One has to be so very brave. You wrote it well :)
ReplyDeletethanks honey
Deleteglad u liked it :)
Thank you for your comment too :)
DeleteSuperb start, a feel full flow, irony, agony well justified...
ReplyDeleteIn short fantastic craft...
beautiful and touchy both...a gud piece!
ReplyDeletethe soldiers are the real heroes.The extreme pressure they undergoes with,the zeal to reach the desired destination and a dogged determination,for victory...Hats off,to all these Heroes of nation.
WoW Very Touching truthy and Heartly awsm Poem it is!!!
ReplyDeleteI just loved it...
Wish You A very Very Happy Independence Day!!
Jai Hind Hows You!!:)
This is one of the brilliant poem I have ever read! Good to re-read it :)
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