Nitrogen is the most abundant gas on earth. Is there anything else which you can compare with N2 ??? Don't give too much stress. There is something which you can find almost everywhere. Hidden or exposed that doesn't matter, but no one can deny its existence. "Corruption" yes, this is what I am talking about. What does corruption thinks about human race, have a look.
Read this poem from corruption's point of view
Read this poem from corruption's point of view
I am a problem a hindrance, in everyone's way
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I command, what you say
Gravely imbibed
As a homogeneous mixture
Swiftly, I'm reinforcing
in an invincible infrastructure.
You've subscribed me
I command, what you say
Gravely imbibed
As a homogeneous mixture
Swiftly, I'm reinforcing
in an invincible infrastructure.
You are my fosterer
Keeper, my caretaker
But, I owe you nothing
not even my loyalty
But, I owe you nothing
not even my loyalty
That's my diplomacy
My rules and policy
Encoded in your genes
I have flawed your inheritance
Dominant or recessive
you can sense my presence.
Redundancy, No chance
As I am destined to enhance.
Getting rid of me
is not an option
Indomitable to you
coz, you forged my adoption
I'll enjoy this realm forever
by virtue of your
divided attentions
and flawed conventions.
See, I told you
Getting rid of me,
is not an option.
PS: Please visit my another blog on which I'll be posting Hindi versions of my poem.
http://hindiscribbles.blogspot.com/
'Getting rid of me
ReplyDeleteis not an option
Indomitable to you
coz, you forged my adoption'
what lines lady!! So apt and profusely meaningful. Believe or not I am writing a post on corruption since 2 weeks or so and I am not able to complete it. It's never ending. The more I do a research on it, it just gets deeper and deeper. You have done a superb job. It's my favorite so far :) I love the wordings
so meaningful thought
ReplyDeleteso aptly put! Its a deep rooted problem... and i agree, its being "Encoded in our genes". With each passing day that is becoming our 'way of life' and its scary to see how fast its spreading!
ReplyDeleteso true that is!
ReplyDeletecorruption is in-filtering out society in such a big way.
your posts really set me thinking!
nice write!
even in the bible. tax collectors are considered as sinners... why? its just a job..
ReplyDeletebut yes, it means that tax collectors, collect more than what is required of their job.
in other words, corruption has been a sickness even in ages ago
that is nice jyoti....
ReplyDeletevery rightly defined
Bravo!! You always write well. But this one...Superb.
ReplyDeleteI wish I could write as well as you do. This would be a fitting answer for my facebook reader for whom I wrote this post
http://www.kiransawhney.com/2011/06/mind-your-own-business.html
Huge Applause.
Although your reference is corruption, I would write in another reference that I mentioned above.
ReplyDeletevery nice
ReplyDeleteGetting rid of me is not an option......you summed it all in best manner...
ReplyDeletei wish something works out and we get rid of it....
amazing thoughts and even better expressions! :)
ReplyDelete..by nature all of us are corrupt... and i believe in that.. though we may not have noticed it at times i am very sure we do... maybe most us don't care much about accepting the fact... and by just simply looking at the term 'don't care' would show a sign of one being corrupt... there are many kinds of corruption in this world Jyoti... it could be on anything.. on anyone... so we really want to eliminate it... let the change start on us... remember, we are change we want to see in this world.... glad to know that you're starting your way towards that big change... this piece is adorable. keep it alive.(:
ReplyDeleteRE: thank you for your comments and for the effort to googled those unfamiliar words... those actually are no stranger to me since i enrolled in a Nihongo class during my undergrad... though i am not fluent at it still...hehehe...(:
Brightest blessings to you.
~Kelvin
Like this poem.
ReplyDeleteRegards.
superb ! Fab Thoughts!!!
ReplyDeletehazare should read this....he'll stop fasting and catch a flight to vegas
ReplyDeleteWell put together and executed. I like how arrogant "corruption" speaks. It would make sense. When survival is assred, one tends to get that way.
ReplyDeleteIt is funny, but corruption has been the foundation of so many of humanities accomplishment's. Or reather, the things that history books tell us are accomplishments I do not think that we are ALL corrupt by nature. Some of us have no ethics, and some of us have very flexible ones,I agree. It is defeatist for me to accept that we are all corrupted, though . Smacks of the Christian concept of "original sin". Corruption is an innate part of the human experience, however.This is just my thought.
Thank you for graciously hosting us. Cheers!
Actually this is wat we Indians are expecting in this crucial time....actually we are in the phase of transformation....from here we have a chance to develop a corruption free INDIA....
ReplyDeleteyou have nicely carved our thinking abt this malignant problem....
lets support Baba Ramdev and Shri Anna Hazare for wat he is doing to eradicate this problem.
NICE POEM BUT END SHOULD BE WITH SOME SOLUTION,not like this as if we are not able to do anything against it.....
REGARDS...
NAVEEN SOLANKI
http://drnaveenkumarsolanki.blogspot.com/
Corruption is deep rooted. Beautifully defined in this creation.
ReplyDeleteThat was so simple yet had so much meaning. Happy writing.
ReplyDelete:)
xoxo
A different view on a relevent topic.
ReplyDeleteWelcome with your hindi poems.
wisely mentioned...Increadible India and Increadible system..Promises are made,none are true.corruption junks everything.every work and every individualistic approach.
ReplyDeleteKeep it up:)
this one is simply superb.
ReplyDeleteGetting rid of me
ReplyDeleteis not an option ...
no!....there is an option in the way of 'A Way'..
corruption does not born with our birth...we adopt it or say we attach it to us after seeing and greeding.....
we can get rid of it by having a positive attitude, self determination, using the brain in constructive way, thinking about to sustain the things, people, environment surrounded to us...
of course, u have pointed out a good issue...
still honesty is in sould of everybody, unfortunately he can not recognize it and is influenced by undue forces.....
well written!
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ReplyDeleteThis is great! Thanks!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful, and yes, the way corruption has seeped into our lives, it is really unavoidable at first. But not totally. We can do it if we want to.
ReplyDeleteCheers,
Blasphemous Aesthete
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ReplyDeleteI command, what you say'
That is a bitter truth. Very deep .. Excellent
Impressed, let me now see Hindi translation.
ReplyDeleteप्रभावशाली अभिव्यक्ति और बेजोड़ शब्द चयन -
ReplyDeleteभ्रष्टाचार हमारे मिथकीय चरित्र सहस्रबाहु जैसा डरावना बन गया है -इसके हजार हाथों को काटने के लिए सभी को आगे आना होगा !
quite true and meaningful :)
ReplyDeleteVery interesting frase
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ReplyDeletelike it!
ReplyDeleteThat's what I always say; 'getting rid of me is not an option' eh
ReplyDeleteI like the viewpoint that you took in writing. It is direct, blunt and truly unapologetic, just as you intended. That's where its power really comes from.
ReplyDeleteInsightful honest post about a problem that will not vanish anytime soon!! Corruption and lies are found on every level of society and there's little to do. Where's our moral compass?? Nice post!!!
ReplyDeleteYou always capture the essence of life in these wonderful scribblings (poems)of yours, I love the way you see how it is people who corrupt our lives, and your not afraid to say it. This blog is a joy to follow, keep up the great work.
ReplyDeleteनाइस पोस्ट।
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ब्लॉग समीक्षा की 20वीं कड़ी...
आई साइबोर्ग, नैतिकता की धज्जियाँ...
wonderfully personified!
ReplyDeleteTo some corruption is their birth right and no wonder why they want to have it. It is clear from the present scenario that corruption recedes it their veins and hence cannot be eradicated, easily.
ReplyDeleteI love those who come from Truth and call a spade a spade...It is a part of life and society...you take on the topics that most shy away from...beautifully written and most of all "Voiced"...
ReplyDeleteEncoded in your genes
ReplyDeleteI have flawed your inheritance
Dominant or recessive
you can sense my presence.
Redundancy, No chance
As I am destined to enhance.
Wonderful lines. Lovely picture, interesting poem and also very meaningful.
So different from usual flow of poetic ideas... Lovely.
ReplyDeleteSuperb jyoti..It's really awesome..u used very apt words..
ReplyDeleteIt is deeply rooted..
Never thought that I'd have a problem,
ReplyDeleteBut the world's no longer that wholesome.
All that there is there,
Is ministers taking money from welfare.
The common man hypes about me,
But nothing is being done to stop the flow of money.
I guess I'll hang around a bit more,
Till you guys get sore.
Read it as if Corruption was the author.
such a very meaningful and very touching poem....
ReplyDeleteMany a time corruption happens at our conscious. Like APJ said, the eraser for corruption should be brought from each home. Very nice and thought provoking poem.
ReplyDeleteThis is a very Deep Poem. The part where it said "getting rid of me is not an option",shows how big the problem is..Nice Poem.
ReplyDeletenice poem.beautifully define,i impressed.congratulation.
ReplyDeleteSo very true .. getting rid well its not possible , to get rid of all .. at the moment of time its more like how to CONTROL It from growing more .. and then slowly decreasing it ..
ReplyDeletelovely poem ..
Bikram's
Jyoti,your poems are always deep.I'm really impressed!
ReplyDeleteWriter jyotes ,indeed you are really! goshhh you are so brilliant ,one of a kind! Hats off! I liked this lines..Getting rid of me
ReplyDeleteis not an option
Indomitable to you
coz, you forged my adoption
I'll enjoy this realm forever
by virtue of your
divided attentions
and flawed conventions.
a blog worth to read
ReplyDeleteVery well said, Jyoti. You have a knack for laying truth down in very clear terms. Recently, I dealt with an episode of what I would define as mob mentality - a blogging situation that got completely out of hand and turned into stalking. Although it was unpleasant, at the time my mind also split into that double perception where I observed how human nature will sadly, and inevitably, jump on a hate-mongering bandwagon with glee. Perhaps not quite the focus you intended with your poem, but it is a facet of corruption all the same, and that's what came to mind when I read this. This had impact, as it is rare that blunt truths are spoken or written. :)
ReplyDeleteVery poetic this corruption guy is....lovely and meaningful
ReplyDeletevery beautiful and hearty poem jyoti
ReplyDeletemy blog link- "samrat bundelkhand"
Jyoti,
ReplyDeleteThe opening introduction was so factual that it goes straight to heart. What corruption says is so true. It is going to be a real miracle if we can even control it what to talk of eradicating it. Very well composed.
Take care
PS : I wrote a post on this issue sometime ago. Do give your views on that but let me know so I can visit that post again. Or my id is in my profile, you can tell me there.
very entertaining food for thought.
ReplyDeleteyou are really talented gurl.
ReplyDeleteu should try your hand on spoken poetry too.
definitly following you!
not related to this topic but please check out if i should have a daughter by sarah kay. you can find it on youtube. just for more creative ideas.
ReplyDeleteexcellent piece of writing....
ReplyDelete'Gravely imbibed
As a homogeneous mixture
Encoded in your genes / I have flawed your inheritance /Getting rid of me,is not an option!!!
we need some genetic engineering.
read this ..http://rajneesh-tiwari.blogspot.com/2011/04/blog-post_12.html
'Encoded in your genes
ReplyDeleteI have flawed your inheritance'
Beautifully said and communicated.
thoughtful meaningful poem
ReplyDeletewell contained...
ReplyDeletecorruption is of many types ,the one you are talking about is monetery one.
ReplyDeleteImagine ,how good a facility it is to just spend few bucks more get the job done in your favour even if the system or the rules doesnot allow it!!would it have been possible otherwise...it saves your time,energy,confidence,winning spirit etc.....and these all for just few more bucks...i think dealing with corruption(either ways)is a lucrative formula!!
Beautifully worded and rhymed Jyoti, though scary to think that it is possible that we might not be able to unsubscribe it from our genes :(.
ReplyDeleteLovely and beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteBrilliant use of words, very nice take on one of the deepest rooted ills in our country! Excellent :)
ReplyDeleteOh,corruption in India, It is deep rooted.
ReplyDeleteThese are well put words,
ReplyDeleteand leave me wondering
do we choose
or are we chosen?
Thank you for the poem! :)
Very true. The corruption was always there, but limited to lower level. But now it has spread its tentacles at the highest level, which is more serious to the society. To eradicate corruption completely is a day dream, but an effort may be made to minimize it. We will have to take the first step ourselves in this regard. If every one takes a pledge not to succumb to corruption from any quarter, then it will certainly have a salutary effect in the society.
ReplyDeleteLove it!
ReplyDeleteYou have such a talent Ms Jyoti!
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omg why get rid of you, you are not hindrance :(
ReplyDeleteVery nice...Very Touching...
ReplyDeleteNicely expressed!!!!.....Corruption has seeped in and has become a convenient way of living..we hate it when we see it acting against us...but when are engrossed in it...we don't seem to notice it :(:(
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