He waited daily
Outside the mall
Just to get a single call
Call of chance
To go inside
And lay eyes on this heaven
With a sense of pride.
He has only seen it in the posters
Or heard about it from his friends
Who were not rich
But they managed to pretend.
Lucky are they
He used think
But he never let his
hopes
flow away or sink.
He used to stare
from outside doors
Shiny lights , People
and crystal clear floors.
Unwanted he began to feel
In front of God everyday
He kneeled.
It was his dream
To go in that mall
To shop for his sister
Buy her The Barbie Doll
Which she has seen
Once in a car
When she was standing
At bus stop, selling flowers.
They both were satisfied before
As they were unaware of
Unwanted desires and galore
Which their little heart
Failed to ignore.
Question Arises ?????
Who is more unwanted
These kids
Who undoubtedly
deserves a future brighter
Or
Their desires
Which are fated
To go higher and higher.
Outside the mall
Just to get a single call
Call of chance
To go inside
And lay eyes on this heaven
With a sense of pride.
He has only seen it in the posters
Or heard about it from his friends
Who were not rich
But they managed to pretend.
Lucky are they
He used think
But he never let his
hopes
flow away or sink.
He used to stare
from outside doors
Shiny lights , People
and crystal clear floors.
Unwanted he began to feel
In front of God everyday
He kneeled.
It was his dream
To go in that mall
To shop for his sister
Buy her The Barbie Doll
Which she has seen
Once in a car
When she was standing
At bus stop, selling flowers.
They both were satisfied before
As they were unaware of
Unwanted desires and galore
Which their little heart
Failed to ignore.
Question Arises ?????
Who is more unwanted
These kids
Who undoubtedly
deserves a future brighter
Or
Their desires
Which are fated
To go higher and higher.
मन को छूने वाली रचना!
ReplyDeleteनिश्चित रूप से वह जिसके समक्ष सुनहरा भविष्य है।
good mishra g
ReplyDeleteheat touching poem
keep it up
excellent
ReplyDeletewhat a beautiful and sad picture you have painted jyoti! A reminder of the beautiful kids who are not as lucky as we are:((
ReplyDeletepoignant and thought provoking!
Thank you for writing this..
Mind blowing beautiful.
ReplyDeleteEvery time you write such profound things in such simple manner.
Wowww
गहरी, हिन्दी में भी व्यक्त करें स्वयं को।
ReplyDeletequite dramatically drafted, beautiful :)
ReplyDeleteAnd one question, plz let me know how to use that like and send button together, fb always ask for some verification. ??
Jyoti,
ReplyDeleteRead 2 very truthful poems. I always say that put yourself in other's shoes before you say anything. That at times leads to little disagreement with my high command as I try to have overall picture before taking any step. This one show such conflict of emotions. He or his desires which should be unwanted. Well, considering he being so young, he can not control his desires but feel as unwanted. It is best to restrict one's desires within means.
Take care
बहुत सुंदर...... संवेदनशील
ReplyDeleteDreams and aspirations know no bounds. And it is but human to reach for them, they do come true, if we try.
ReplyDeleteI'd tell the boy to go for it. He can, if he wants to.
Nice read, and a beautiful message in it.
Cheers,
Blasphemous Aesthete
delicate and nascent hearts always keep desires to fulfill other's desires.
ReplyDeletebeautiful expression...
Oh wow! You are talented!
ReplyDeletenicely scribbled!!!
ReplyDeleteyou have expressed innocent feelings of a little one .too good this time .have a nice day.
ReplyDeleteIs not the answer to questions is the same? Neither children nor their desire are unwanted from the children's perspective. I do not think their is a conflict here. Their desires' are not so high even at the highest level.
ReplyDeleteThink about the greed of already so rich people...
that was beautiful jyoti!!
ReplyDeleteim lost of words its kind of sad way to look at reality
What a heart-rendering poem. They were satisfied before they saw what they were missing...
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing, Jyoti. :)
Random scribbles my ass eh :)
ReplyDeleteLovely! "They were satisfied before they saw what they were missing" - its so innocent and natural to feel that way... But the same thing in excess, leads to greed!
ReplyDeleteHeart touching lovely poem jyoti.. :)
ReplyDeleteThere is no end to human desires but it is our duty to provide children a bright future. After all they are nation's human resources.
ReplyDeleteNice poem.
ReplyDeleteThey both were satisfied before
ReplyDeleteAs they were unaware of
Unwanted desires and galore
Which their little heart
Failed to ignore.
Question Arises ?????
Who is more unwanted
These kids
Who undoubtedly
deserves a future brighter
Or
Their desires
Which are fated
To go higher and higher.
"a great question indeed....human must have to learn differentiating 'need and desire'.....has to work for need and should work for desire until the desires become unethical and unjustifie.....
every human has a right to desire and deserve for the bright future.....
according to your poem nothing is unwanted....neither those children nor their desires.....
Excellent expressions u made here....
that's really nice yaar
ReplyDeleteOh honey, this hit my heart. You write about those difficult topics, the ones that many would prefer to ignore or sweep under the proverbial carpet. Yet you do it in such a manner that the heart CAN bear the pain, because awareness DOES matter. Keep using your writing to shed that beautiful Light, Jyoti.
ReplyDelete~ Dawn
Jyoti, in reading you words for the first time, your gift and you Light (one and the same) are evident. Keep feeding it in joy, for joy. Feelings and musings on them are always valuable. Great work!
ReplyDeleteAnother beautiful insight into the sadness in our world..yet gives hope.
ReplyDeleteThere desires come from a purity of youth...not knowing any other way...even though he was physiclly outside looking in...inwardly..he was experiencing the living of his dream...
Dreams and desires do go higher and higher..from here we manifest from the truth of the Spirit within...
Yet another beautifully written poem...that makes us all go inward...
I can understand your expressions and i was feeling the same thing when working on the customer service of a famous retail chain.
ReplyDeleteVery much touchy poem.
Regards.
Ah,Jioti! What emotional depth you have put into this...These are the kinds of poems that haunt the poet and reader alike. I am awed. Far from "random", this one gets "under the skin".
ReplyDeleteसंवेदनशील तथा ह्रदय को छूने वाली कविता.
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful and moving poem Jyoti! Loved it!
ReplyDeleteThat broke my heart - lovely lovely poem!
ReplyDeletejust awesome.... now i can say that i found another best blog to add in my list...
ReplyDeleteThanks Jyoti ma'am for such wonderful lines...
Ah! Sibling love. It is something peculiar to see how this love grows and blossom in a form of protection.
ReplyDeleteA nice poetry Jyoti.
बिटिया -मुझको अंग्रेजी समझ में तो आजाती है लेकिन लिख नहीं सकता । इसी तरह कोई बोल रहा हो तो समझ आजाता है किन्तु बोल नहीं सकता। दो चार शब्द जो मेरी समझ मे नहीं आये । वैसे जितनी समझ आई उससे कविता भावनात्मक लगी
ReplyDeleteLoveeeely!
ReplyDeletethe curse of advertising
ReplyDeleteexcellent flow of emotions.........
ReplyDeleteशेक्सपीयर ने पहले ही कह रखा है आल दैट ग्लिटर्स इज नाट गोल्ड ..
ReplyDeleteफिर चमक धमक के पीछे कोई क्यों जाय ?
बच्चों के सामने ऐसे दृश्य ही उपस्थित क्यों हो ? पर ये तो दुनिया है ..यहाँ ऐसे ही अरमानों की मौत होती रहेगी ....
तुम्हारी इस सुन्दर सी कविता से एक बड़ा सवाल भी उभरता है -क्या हमारी संस्कृतियाँ संक्रमण काल से गुजर रही हैं ..वंचितों को सब्जबाग दिखलाकर क्या हम उन्हें उनकी मौलिकता से अलग कर रहे हैं -
emotional poem but some question are unanswered,
ReplyDeleteJyoti thank you for reading FREEBIRD and wonderful comments.
ReplyDeleteSorry, I dont understand poetry, but this is one of the most meaningful, emotional and evocative ones I have read.You sure are a sensitive wonderful human being.
Good Luck dear.
wow nice.. It made me cry... somehow in my younger years I was unwanted by my peers... you remind me of it but not in a sad way.. I am glad I was unwanted it made me want something and really strive hard to get it..
ReplyDeleteShakespeare has already said- " All that glitters is not gold".
ReplyDeleteThen why everyone is racing blindly for this glitz ???
Why such instances are being presented before children... But this is world
Aspirations and hopes are crushed as ever.
A big question arises from your beautifully written poem- Is our culture is going through a contagious transition ?
Are we distracting the underprivileged section of society from their originality?
(Translated from Hindi by J.M.(Jyoti Misjra)
This is truly very moving!
ReplyDelete..dat was amazingly written jyoti..
ReplyDelete..as always i love reading ur poems..
..dey touch every chord of our heart..
..u ve great talent..do keep writing..
..one day..d world ll b ur oyster..
..all d best in life.. :) ;)
nice poem ............:)
ReplyDeletetouching........
really touching, but kids are not unwanted in any case, whatever society says,
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and d amazing adorable lines....
ReplyDelete"It was his dream
To go in that mall
To shop for his sister
Buy her The Barbie Doll
Which she has seen
Once in a car
When she was standing
At bus stop, selling flowers."
very nice
ReplyDeletewonderful! I really enjoy reading your stuff!!
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Wow...Superb piece of writing...Congrats
ReplyDeleteNeeraj
Wao....! Its nice to read u. Reading u I feel very happy that I can understand Eng. poems too.
ReplyDeletebefore it I thaught that my Eng. is very poor to understand.
सरलतम शब्दों में गहनतम अभिव्यक्ति मुझे अच्छी लगती है। प्रस्तुत कविता ह्रदयस्पर्शी है। सच कहें तो जब तक एक भी बच्चा इस प्रकार से बेचैन है, आधुनिक चकाचौंध बेमानी है।
आपको हिंदी कविता का दूसरा ब्लॉग भी बनाना चाहिए। अभिव्यक्ति मातृभाषा में और निखरेगी।
शुभकामनाएँ...
Thought provoking ... wonderful writing once again ...
ReplyDeleteLovely Jyoti...without desire no upward movement is possible...U write so well...continue scribblings on the wall...one day it will become a historical monument'
ReplyDeleteYour poem is breathtaking. The words are easily moving till this last question I am not sure we have an answer for. Well done! You are a great writer.
ReplyDeleteWe must all have dreams to get reaching upwards toward the sky. On another level we belong but to get there often takes much determination and the ability to sidestep rejection. Nice post!!
ReplyDeletewithout positive dream , nothing possible...nice and moments are impotent.
ReplyDeleteA story nicely woven...
ReplyDeleteStriking reality,
And a question to be answered!
इन अनछुए से विचारों को अभिव्यक्त कर सराहनीय कार्य किया है आपने, बधाई.
ReplyDeleteNICE POST..its my first time here..Your newest follower.. :)
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...those unwanted feelings, i believe, were only the beginning of a greener pasture that's yet to come.... i feel many situations like that when i am still working as a catechist teaching those child on the street and at times indifferent remote areas...i enjoyed the read Jyoti... thank you.(:
ReplyDeleteBrightest blessings to you.
~Kelvin
.neither the kids nor their desires its the door which comes in between the two ! I can feel the pain !! it was really touching ! i have also tried to give an expression to unfulfilled desires of such kids :
ReplyDelete(a) http://rajneesh-tiwari.blogspot.com/2010/11/blog-post_4027.html
(b)http://rajneesh-tiwari.blogspot.com/2010/12/1.html
"Unwanted desires"............touched me.......lovely poetry.......
ReplyDeleteI came here first time..........Very nice blog.........congratulations
दुनिया में कुछ भी अवांछित नहीं है । हमारे इस जन्म के कर्म ही अगले जन्म का प्रारब्ध बनते हैं। जो ईश्वर की कृपा से साधन संपन्न हैं , उन्हें यथा-शक्ति मदद करनी चाहिए ज़रूरतमंदों की । शेष हरी इच्छा।
ReplyDeleteकठिन प्रश्न, सुन्दर रचना!
ReplyDeletewow....ur writing is superb....i cant believe u liked my poem coz urs is a really high level....bt thnx anyway...
ReplyDeleteVery nice...Very Touching...
ReplyDeleteAdoring it is...the love...the dreams...and the wishes :)
ReplyDeletehere the unwanted desires, will make the boy stronger to achieve his dream...and never will make themselves as unwanted
Brilliant composition! Heart warming...it is..
ReplyDeleteVery beautiful... you indeed have a popular blog and a huge following... you truly think well..and then express too choosing right words.. I felt nice about visiting here thro..RM's page..
ReplyDeleteHi Jyoti,
ReplyDeleteA nice post over the common desires , so well composed ..and how nicely you have created the scene which keep coming live as we read ..
The desires which makes everyone to sway ..to its beats ..
It was a nice read ..and a nice blog you have got.
Take care.
Wow! I see these kids on the streets wandering nowhere and desiring what not. sometimes I feel it's quiet natural and other times I feel scared thinking they might chose the wrong ways to fulfill what you called these 'unwanted' desires.. It's such a tender age for temptations but again... think, isn't it quiet natural? They are just kids afterall.. they see other rich kids have everything they need and don't need.
ReplyDeleteGood one Jyo. again! :)
Upon reading song flashed in my mind which goes like this..I believe the children are our are future
ReplyDeleteTeach them well and let them lead the way
Show them all the beauty they possess inside
Give them a sense of pride ....
Children deserved all the best in this world!
Love this post so much..
kya baat hai..sundar
ReplyDeletevery beautiful poem which deeply touches your heart..very sensitive narration...who is responsible for crushing their even minor and innocent desires? Some times you feel helpless in this cruel world...
ReplyDeleteVery touching poem. Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteWho is more unwanted
ReplyDeleteThese kids
Who undoubtedly
deserves a future brighter
Or
Their desires
Which are fated
To go higher and higher.
EXCELLENT EXPRESSIONS..... Dear Jyoti Mishra ! Your writing is superb.
hey jyoti! :)
ReplyDeletei replied to your comment :))
http://chickbud.blogspot.com/2011/06/what-will-our-neighbors-say.html
You write very beautifully.This was touching and impressive.
ReplyDeletehi jyoti :)
ReplyDeleteregarding your comment, i dont think so.. as you would see the comparison of friends i made in my post the other side of the world apparently thinks differently and sometimes even encourage gap years.
in europe it is also very common, thus they call it "gap year" ;)
http://chickbud.blogspot.com/2011/06/what-will-our-neighbors-say.html
hey jyoti
ReplyDeletereplied! :)
and by comparison of friends, i was just basing it as a reflection of their upbringing of which culture they are in. that is, asian & western :)
ReplyDeleteWonderful and very much thought provioking.
ReplyDeleteVery beautiful and touching poem. You have painted the whole scenario in such a interesting way that the poem is really mind-blowing and I feel its one of your best poem. The picture is fantastic and expresses a lot.
ReplyDeleteनाइस पोस्ट।
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Jyoti, did you see the wiki pedia Link? :) it wrote exactly what you said the reason for having gap year in India :)
ReplyDeleteसुंदर कोमल और संवेदनशील भाव बेहद खूबसूरत रचना!
ReplyDeletevery deep .. touching
ReplyDeletethis is a very touching poem, it reminded me of my childhood. After all, it's the feeling of not getting what you want that makes you desire to jump higher and succeed.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem, Jyoti, as always! How tragic it is that millions of beautiful children end up feeling unwanted and disappointed because we, the adults, fail to fulfill our duties in an appropriate manner. I wish this child would understand that his dreams are far more valuable than anything/everything in that mall. May he continues to dream...
ReplyDeleteBeautiful!. It reminds me about the kids who were the inhabitants of the slums where the DB Mall stands now.
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jyoti ji
ReplyDeletebahut hi jabardast prastuti
bilkul sachchai ko saath liye hue ek ek shabd yatharth ko prastut kar rahe hain .
bahut bahut badhai
aapki lekhni ko
poonam
You succeeded in entering the minds of some people.
ReplyDeletevery touching....
ReplyDeleteYou must be a great observer of people of Jyoti :). A bit of conundrum here. Desires are like goals which inspire us to keep reaching to acieve them. Don't know if they are unwanted. But the kids are definitely NOT unwanted.
ReplyDeleteThanks for this thought-provoking post, Jyoti! That last question is so powerful and rings in my mind! Love your writing. =)
ReplyDeleteI am impressed :)
ReplyDeleteinnocent desires, amongst the wild world..