Saturday, June 11, 2011

Unwanted



He waited daily 
Outside the mall 
Just to get a single call 
Call of chance 
To go inside 
And lay eyes on this heaven 
With a sense of pride.

He has only seen it in the posters
Or heard about it from his friends
Who were not rich 
But they managed to pretend.
Lucky are they 
He used think 
But he never let his 
hopes 
flow away or sink.

He used to stare 
from outside doors 
Shiny lights , People 
and crystal clear floors.
Unwanted he began to feel 
In front of God everyday 
He kneeled.

It was his dream
To go in that mall 
To shop for his sister 
Buy her The Barbie Doll
Which she has seen 
Once in a car 
When she was standing 
At bus stop, selling flowers.

They both were satisfied before 
As they were unaware of 
Unwanted desires and galore 
Which their little heart 
Failed to ignore.
Question Arises ?????
Who is more unwanted
These kids
Who undoubtedly
deserves a future brighter 
                Or
Their desires 
Which are fated 
To go higher and higher.

99 comments:

  1. मन को छूने वाली रचना!
    निश्चित रूप से वह जिसके समक्ष सुनहरा भविष्य है।

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  2. good mishra g
    heat touching poem
    keep it up

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  3. what a beautiful and sad picture you have painted jyoti! A reminder of the beautiful kids who are not as lucky as we are:((
    poignant and thought provoking!
    Thank you for writing this..

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  4. Mind blowing beautiful.
    Every time you write such profound things in such simple manner.
    Wowww

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  5. गहरी, हिन्दी में भी व्यक्त करें स्वयं को।

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  6. quite dramatically drafted, beautiful :)

    And one question, plz let me know how to use that like and send button together, fb always ask for some verification. ??

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  7. Jyoti,

    Read 2 very truthful poems. I always say that put yourself in other's shoes before you say anything. That at times leads to little disagreement with my high command as I try to have overall picture before taking any step. This one show such conflict of emotions. He or his desires which should be unwanted. Well, considering he being so young, he can not control his desires but feel as unwanted. It is best to restrict one's desires within means.

    Take care

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  8. बहुत सुंदर...... संवेदनशील

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  9. Dreams and aspirations know no bounds. And it is but human to reach for them, they do come true, if we try.
    I'd tell the boy to go for it. He can, if he wants to.

    Nice read, and a beautiful message in it.

    Cheers,
    Blasphemous Aesthete

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  10. delicate and nascent hearts always keep desires to fulfill other's desires.

    beautiful expression...

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  11. you have expressed innocent feelings of a little one .too good this time .have a nice day.

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  12. Is not the answer to questions is the same? Neither children nor their desire are unwanted from the children's perspective. I do not think their is a conflict here. Their desires' are not so high even at the highest level.

    Think about the greed of already so rich people...

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  13. that was beautiful jyoti!!

    im lost of words its kind of sad way to look at reality

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  14. What a heart-rendering poem. They were satisfied before they saw what they were missing...

    Thank you for sharing, Jyoti. :)

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  15. Lovely! "They were satisfied before they saw what they were missing" - its so innocent and natural to feel that way... But the same thing in excess, leads to greed!

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  16. Heart touching lovely poem jyoti.. :)

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  17. There is no end to human desires but it is our duty to provide children a bright future. After all they are nation's human resources.

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  18. They both were satisfied before
    As they were unaware of
    Unwanted desires and galore
    Which their little heart
    Failed to ignore.
    Question Arises ?????
    Who is more unwanted
    These kids
    Who undoubtedly
    deserves a future brighter
    Or
    Their desires
    Which are fated
    To go higher and higher.

    "a great question indeed....human must have to learn differentiating 'need and desire'.....has to work for need and should work for desire until the desires become unethical and unjustifie.....

    every human has a right to desire and deserve for the bright future.....

    according to your poem nothing is unwanted....neither those children nor their desires.....

    Excellent expressions u made here....

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  19. Oh honey, this hit my heart. You write about those difficult topics, the ones that many would prefer to ignore or sweep under the proverbial carpet. Yet you do it in such a manner that the heart CAN bear the pain, because awareness DOES matter. Keep using your writing to shed that beautiful Light, Jyoti.

    ~ Dawn

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  20. Jyoti, in reading you words for the first time, your gift and you Light (one and the same) are evident. Keep feeding it in joy, for joy. Feelings and musings on them are always valuable. Great work!

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  21. Another beautiful insight into the sadness in our world..yet gives hope.

    There desires come from a purity of youth...not knowing any other way...even though he was physiclly outside looking in...inwardly..he was experiencing the living of his dream...

    Dreams and desires do go higher and higher..from here we manifest from the truth of the Spirit within...

    Yet another beautifully written poem...that makes us all go inward...

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  22. I can understand your expressions and i was feeling the same thing when working on the customer service of a famous retail chain.

    Very much touchy poem.

    Regards.

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  23. Ah,Jioti! What emotional depth you have put into this...These are the kinds of poems that haunt the poet and reader alike. I am awed. Far from "random", this one gets "under the skin".

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  24. संवेदनशील तथा ह्रदय को छूने वाली कविता.

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  25. What a beautiful and moving poem Jyoti! Loved it!

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  26. That broke my heart - lovely lovely poem!

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  27. just awesome.... now i can say that i found another best blog to add in my list...

    Thanks Jyoti ma'am for such wonderful lines...

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  28. Ah! Sibling love. It is something peculiar to see how this love grows and blossom in a form of protection.
    A nice poetry Jyoti.

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  29. बिटिया -मुझको अंग्रेजी समझ में तो आजाती है लेकिन लिख नहीं सकता । इसी तरह कोई बोल रहा हो तो समझ आजाता है किन्तु बोल नहीं सकता। दो चार शब्द जो मेरी समझ मे नहीं आये । वैसे जितनी समझ आई उससे कविता भावनात्मक लगी

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  30. शेक्सपीयर ने पहले ही कह रखा है आल दैट ग्लिटर्स इज नाट गोल्ड ..
    फिर चमक धमक के पीछे कोई क्यों जाय ?
    बच्चों के सामने ऐसे दृश्य ही उपस्थित क्यों हो ? पर ये तो दुनिया है ..यहाँ ऐसे ही अरमानों की मौत होती रहेगी ....
    तुम्हारी इस सुन्दर सी कविता से एक बड़ा सवाल भी उभरता है -क्या हमारी संस्कृतियाँ संक्रमण काल से गुजर रही हैं ..वंचितों को सब्जबाग दिखलाकर क्या हम उन्हें उनकी मौलिकता से अलग कर रहे हैं -

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  31. emotional poem but some question are unanswered,

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  32. Jyoti thank you for reading FREEBIRD and wonderful comments.

    Sorry, I dont understand poetry, but this is one of the most meaningful, emotional and evocative ones I have read.You sure are a sensitive wonderful human being.
    Good Luck dear.

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  33. wow nice.. It made me cry... somehow in my younger years I was unwanted by my peers... you remind me of it but not in a sad way.. I am glad I was unwanted it made me want something and really strive hard to get it..

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  34. Shakespeare has already said- " All that glitters is not gold".

    Then why everyone is racing blindly for this glitz ???

    Why such instances are being presented before children... But this is world
    Aspirations and hopes are crushed as ever.

    A big question arises from your beautifully written poem- Is our culture is going through a contagious transition ?

    Are we distracting the underprivileged section of society from their originality?
    (Translated from Hindi by J.M.(Jyoti Misjra)

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  35. ..dat was amazingly written jyoti..
    ..as always i love reading ur poems..
    ..dey touch every chord of our heart..
    ..u ve great talent..do keep writing..
    ..one day..d world ll b ur oyster..
    ..all d best in life.. :) ;)

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  36. really touching, but kids are not unwanted in any case, whatever society says,
    विवेक जैन vivj2000.blogspot.com

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  37. and d amazing adorable lines....

    "It was his dream
    To go in that mall
    To shop for his sister
    Buy her The Barbie Doll
    Which she has seen
    Once in a car
    When she was standing
    At bus stop, selling flowers."

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  38. wonderful! I really enjoy reading your stuff!!

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  39. @manoj, @p k sharma, @Rashmi, @tarunima,

    @kiran: Thank u

    @praveen: I'll try some day

    @rachit: I've mailed u the details

    @jack: u got it all right.

    @Dr. Monika, @blasphemous aesthete,

    @amit, @feexa, @faizan, @sikha: thanks

    @A: Those kids are spoiled brats. Thanks

    @c e hart, @blaq, @TheGirlAtFirstAvenue,

    @gowthami: thank u guys

    @bhushan:yes sir its our duty.

    @devendra: u got the crux of the poem

    @chirag, @Dawn, @rich P, @raven, @yash,

    @ion, @arunkumar, @tulika, @kirti,

    @prateek: thanks for commenting.

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    commenting

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  40. Wao....! Its nice to read u. Reading u I feel very happy that I can understand Eng. poems too.
    before it I thaught that my Eng. is very poor to understand.
    सरलतम शब्दों में गहनतम अभिव्यक्ति मुझे अच्छी लगती है। प्रस्तुत कविता ह्रदयस्पर्शी है। सच कहें तो जब तक एक भी बच्चा इस प्रकार से बेचैन है, आधुनिक चकाचौंध बेमानी है।

    आपको हिंदी कविता का दूसरा ब्लॉग भी बनाना चाहिए। अभिव्यक्ति मातृभाषा में और निखरेगी।
    शुभकामनाएँ...

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  41. Thought provoking ... wonderful writing once again ...

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  42. Lovely Jyoti...without desire no upward movement is possible...U write so well...continue scribblings on the wall...one day it will become a historical monument'

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  43. Your poem is breathtaking. The words are easily moving till this last question I am not sure we have an answer for. Well done! You are a great writer.

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  44. We must all have dreams to get reaching upwards toward the sky. On another level we belong but to get there often takes much determination and the ability to sidestep rejection. Nice post!!

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  45. without positive dream , nothing possible...nice and moments are impotent.

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  46. A story nicely woven...
    Striking reality,
    And a question to be answered!

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  47. इन अनछुए से विचारों को अभिव्यक्त कर सराहनीय कार्य किया है आपने, बधाई.

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  48. NICE POST..its my first time here..Your newest follower.. :)

    www.didis-view.blogspot.com

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  49. ...those unwanted feelings, i believe, were only the beginning of a greener pasture that's yet to come.... i feel many situations like that when i am still working as a catechist teaching those child on the street and at times indifferent remote areas...i enjoyed the read Jyoti... thank you.(:

    Brightest blessings to you.

    ~Kelvin

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  50. .neither the kids nor their desires its the door which comes in between the two ! I can feel the pain !! it was really touching ! i have also tried to give an expression to unfulfilled desires of such kids :
    (a) http://rajneesh-tiwari.blogspot.com/2010/11/blog-post_4027.html
    (b)http://rajneesh-tiwari.blogspot.com/2010/12/1.html

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  51. "Unwanted desires"............touched me.......lovely poetry.......
    I came here first time..........Very nice blog.........congratulations

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  52. दुनिया में कुछ भी अवांछित नहीं है । हमारे इस जन्म के कर्म ही अगले जन्म का प्रारब्ध बनते हैं। जो ईश्वर की कृपा से साधन संपन्न हैं , उन्हें यथा-शक्ति मदद करनी चाहिए ज़रूरतमंदों की । शेष हरी इच्छा।

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  53. कठिन प्रश्न, सुन्दर रचना!

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  54. wow....ur writing is superb....i cant believe u liked my poem coz urs is a really high level....bt thnx anyway...

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  55. Adoring it is...the love...the dreams...and the wishes :)

    here the unwanted desires, will make the boy stronger to achieve his dream...and never will make themselves as unwanted

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  56. Brilliant composition! Heart warming...it is..

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  57. Very beautiful... you indeed have a popular blog and a huge following... you truly think well..and then express too choosing right words.. I felt nice about visiting here thro..RM's page..

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  58. Hi Jyoti,

    A nice post over the common desires , so well composed ..and how nicely you have created the scene which keep coming live as we read ..

    The desires which makes everyone to sway ..to its beats ..

    It was a nice read ..and a nice blog you have got.

    Take care.

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  59. Wow! I see these kids on the streets wandering nowhere and desiring what not. sometimes I feel it's quiet natural and other times I feel scared thinking they might chose the wrong ways to fulfill what you called these 'unwanted' desires.. It's such a tender age for temptations but again... think, isn't it quiet natural? They are just kids afterall.. they see other rich kids have everything they need and don't need.
    Good one Jyo. again! :)

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  60. Upon reading song flashed in my mind which goes like this..I believe the children are our are future
    Teach them well and let them lead the way
    Show them all the beauty they possess inside
    Give them a sense of pride ....

    Children deserved all the best in this world!

    Love this post so much..

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  61. very beautiful poem which deeply touches your heart..very sensitive narration...who is responsible for crushing their even minor and innocent desires? Some times you feel helpless in this cruel world...

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  62. Very touching poem. Thanks for sharing.

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  63. Who is more unwanted
    These kids
    Who undoubtedly
    deserves a future brighter
    Or
    Their desires
    Which are fated
    To go higher and higher.

    EXCELLENT EXPRESSIONS..... Dear Jyoti Mishra ! Your writing is superb.

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  64. hey jyoti! :)

    i replied to your comment :))

    http://chickbud.blogspot.com/2011/06/what-will-our-neighbors-say.html

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  65. You write very beautifully.This was touching and impressive.

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  66. hi jyoti :)

    regarding your comment, i dont think so.. as you would see the comparison of friends i made in my post the other side of the world apparently thinks differently and sometimes even encourage gap years.

    in europe it is also very common, thus they call it "gap year" ;)

    http://chickbud.blogspot.com/2011/06/what-will-our-neighbors-say.html

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  67. and by comparison of friends, i was just basing it as a reflection of their upbringing of which culture they are in. that is, asian & western :)

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  68. Wonderful and very much thought provioking.

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  69. Very beautiful and touching poem. You have painted the whole scenario in such a interesting way that the poem is really mind-blowing and I feel its one of your best poem. The picture is fantastic and expresses a lot.

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  71. Jyoti, did you see the wiki pedia Link? :) it wrote exactly what you said the reason for having gap year in India :)

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  72. सुंदर कोमल और संवेदनशील भाव बेहद खूबसूरत रचना!

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  73. this is a very touching poem, it reminded me of my childhood. After all, it's the feeling of not getting what you want that makes you desire to jump higher and succeed.

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  74. Beautiful poem, Jyoti, as always! How tragic it is that millions of beautiful children end up feeling unwanted and disappointed because we, the adults, fail to fulfill our duties in an appropriate manner. I wish this child would understand that his dreams are far more valuable than anything/everything in that mall. May he continues to dream...

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  75. Beautiful!. It reminds me about the kids who were the inhabitants of the slums where the DB Mall stands now.
    http://mallar.wordpress.com

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  76. jyoti ji
    bahut hi jabardast prastuti
    bilkul sachchai ko saath liye hue ek ek shabd yatharth ko prastut kar rahe hain .
    bahut bahut badhai
    aapki lekhni ko
    poonam

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  77. You succeeded in entering the minds of some people.

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  78. You must be a great observer of people of Jyoti :). A bit of conundrum here. Desires are like goals which inspire us to keep reaching to acieve them. Don't know if they are unwanted. But the kids are definitely NOT unwanted.

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  79. Thanks for this thought-provoking post, Jyoti! That last question is so powerful and rings in my mind! Love your writing. =)

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  80. I am impressed :)
    innocent desires, amongst the wild world..

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